"How do you really feel?"-Overheard a phone conversation from a friend.
"I should have worked out instead of taking a nap."- Conversation I had with the girlfriend.
"That is really unique."- Step dads comment on a national geographic show.
"Well that could have went better."- My thought from the weekend.
You have good structure for your script. I want you to include a narrative description at the head to set up the scene. You are missing a conflict or element of surprise. Son is painting in room, dad is impressed, they go fishing. I want the subject of the painting to be really risque or shocking in some way and I want the audience to get a surprise reveal of that painting at the end.
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